Elevator Pitch No. 1


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  1. Hello Grant! I like your problem and solution, and how your hook included a statistics to grab the viewer's attention. There are a couple of things that could be improved, particularly with your video quality and your body movements. I'm not sure which recording device you use, but if you could either move it to get better lighting or get an external source of light, it would make the video look much better. Additionally, it seems that you swayed a lot during your pitch, which can be distracting. But the message was great and I agree wholeheartedly.

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  2. Hi Grant,
    I find that you have discovered an ongoing problem in today's world and a solution to that problem. Moreover, I find that you had a very persuasive elevator pitch, as you started your speech with important and uncommon statistics. In order to create a better elevator pitch, I would recommend recording yourself in area with better lighting, and I would consider wearing more professional clothing, like a sports coat and a button down.

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  3. Hey Grant! Good start with the statistic! 1 in 5 kids is a very concerning number, and definitely hooks prospective customers to listen to what you have to say. You were very enthusiastic and knowledgeable about your opportunity, so the pitch was very easy to follow. Your hand movements helped get certain points across, but be careful with moving them around too much, as that can become distracting. Good job though!

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