Reading Reflection No. 3
1) You read about an entrepreneur: What surprised you the most? I think what surprised me the most is it didn't try to hide some of his less remarkable qualities (like his thoughts on women). What about the entrepreneur did you most admire? I admire that his goal is essentially to help save humans from themselves. What about the entrepreneur did you least admire? I don't like how often he snaps at people in anger-filled rampages. Did the entrepreneur encounter adversity and failure? If so, what did they do about it? His journey to creating multiple hugely successful companies was littered with challenges, but his desire for perfection allowed him to overcome them, and then move on to his next project. 2) What competencies did you notice that the entrepreneur exhibited? He cares deeply about his work. He puts his all into it and doesn't stop until the output is perfect. 3) Identify at least one part of the reading that was confusing to yo...
Hello Grant! I like your problem and solution, and how your hook included a statistics to grab the viewer's attention. There are a couple of things that could be improved, particularly with your video quality and your body movements. I'm not sure which recording device you use, but if you could either move it to get better lighting or get an external source of light, it would make the video look much better. Additionally, it seems that you swayed a lot during your pitch, which can be distracting. But the message was great and I agree wholeheartedly.
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ReplyDeleteI find that you have discovered an ongoing problem in today's world and a solution to that problem. Moreover, I find that you had a very persuasive elevator pitch, as you started your speech with important and uncommon statistics. In order to create a better elevator pitch, I would recommend recording yourself in area with better lighting, and I would consider wearing more professional clothing, like a sports coat and a button down.
Hey Grant! Good start with the statistic! 1 in 5 kids is a very concerning number, and definitely hooks prospective customers to listen to what you have to say. You were very enthusiastic and knowledgeable about your opportunity, so the pitch was very easy to follow. Your hand movements helped get certain points across, but be careful with moving them around too much, as that can become distracting. Good job though!
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